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Review #1, by Anonymous Muggle Nightmare

27th July 2016:
I like this, it's a good set-up. Interesting premise. Very vivid descriptions.

Minor editing suggestions: trim a few more of the instances of "Elena" out of the early paragraphs. Just those few times when it could be replaced by another "she". I always like the repetition of names at the start, but a couple less would flow better.

I'll say here as well that the prologue was a great description of a canonical scene. Solid writing. I'm hooked!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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