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Review #1, by Tecla Sunrise Michael Kane

18th February 2018:
Great chapter! and great plot twist with the arrival of Micheal - arranged marriage is what every girl needs, eh?
Nice job! xxx

Author's Response: Micheal is my favourite character to write about. Hehe.
Stay tuned I've just put chapter eleven in the queue. xx

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Review #2, by MalfoyMannor The Boyfriend

8th January 2018:
I just found your story and I am hooked!!

The plot is everything, I love it.

can't wait till the next chapter :)

Author's Response: Welcome to tainted. Hehe.
Expects loads of drama and sass.
The plot is gonna densify more in the next few chapters so I hope you enjoy them more.
Chapter ten is currently under edits. Stay tuned. :D

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Review #3, by Shruti One date.

10th December 2017:
Hey ya
One more thing.
There is definitely more to it.
If her father is planning all these attacks. Why would he just attack James?
I mean I get it that she was his best friend but still.

And yeah please show more of jay and izzy. I love these two a lot.
Waiting for the next chapter.
More action and drama are welcome.😂❤
Can you please show more of our wotter clan??
I love the wotters❤❤

Author's Response: You'll find out about the attacks soon. Those attacks have a long way to go.
Oh you'll definitely get more Izzy James action.
I wasnt planning a lot of wotter clan action as I was concentrating on the purebloods more with the exception of a few mentions here and there. But I guess I'll reconsider that too. :)

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Review #4, by Shruti One date.

10th December 2017:
I had some doubts. So I decided to read the whole fic again. The thing that confuses me is that in the first chap izzy and James have their first convo in the end of the first year. Ri8? But they have spoken before that ri8? When he offers her to teach flying.
And how come she was his best friend. So did they become friends in the second year??
I mean wasn't she running away from him?
I was surprised to know they both were besties.

Well talking about the 7th chap. When they were in the deserted corridor. That scene was❤❤
Jay and izzy❤❤
I ship them so hard.

But I really wanna know why James is being targeted.
Why are a bunch of slytherins attacking him??
If I am not wrong I think izzy stopped talking to him because of this?
As she said to keep him safe.

Author's Response: Hey hey hey. I'll try and answer all your questions as best as I can because I don't want to give too much away cause I want you to enjoy reading the rest too. Izzy and James have their first conversation before winter break in first year. As far as I remember. But since I wrote that chapter so long ago I think it's best that I revisit it. But know that that meeting happens half way through first year.
Over time, the two become close. As for the attacks. I don't want to give anything away so no comments. Haha. :D.
But keep reading and you'll find out and (hopefully) enjoy it too.
P. S. Your reviews make me happy.

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Review #5, by Z One date.

8th December 2017:
loving this very much x

Author's Response: Always happy to hear that you're enjoying this. I've just put chapter nine up for validation. Stay tuned. :D. Let me know what you think.

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Review #6, by Scose One date.

28th November 2017:
Wonderful story! Love reading it and cant wait for more.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying it. Please let me know what you love, what you hate.
Look out for chapter 9. :D. More action coming your way. Hehe.

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Review #7, by Shruti One date.

20th November 2017:
I am back
I am sorry I couldn't leave a review for so long.
I will read both 7 and 8 and then leave a review.
I am soo excited.
I had started with 7 but I had some assignments to complete.
But yeah now I have 2 chaps to read

Author's Response: Heey. Its so good to have you back!!! Yes. Please read 7 and 8. I really wanna know what you think. What you like, what you hate.
Your reviews make me happy. :').

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Review #8, by AhsokaAmidala34 Explanation

29th October 2017:
Ooh.. The pigeon...Anyways, this is an amazing story! It forces you to keep reading because it is so addictive! Are Mike and Dom together! Keep writing plz!

Author's Response: AAa! Thankks. I'm so glad to hear you're enjoying it. Makes my day. Please keep reading. Chapter 8 is in queue. :D

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Review #9, by Scose Explanation

14th October 2017:
I love the scenes between isobel and james. Looking forward to seeing where it goes and what's gonna happen next. Can't wait for the next chapter:)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. :D. It's so good to know you're enjoying them. Be on the outlook for the next chapter. Isobel and James have a long way to go.

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Review #10, by Shruti Explanation

12th October 2017:
It's updated
I haven't read it yet.
I will read it soon and leave you a review.
*runs to read*

Author's Response: Hahahahaha. I hope you enjoy it. :D

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Review #11, by Shruti Manipulation

8th October 2017:

You are really killing an innocent being with the delay.
Please update soon.

Author's Response: Shruti, you're a sweetheart, Please don't die.Because:
A) I really don't fancy murder on my hands.
B) I've just put chapter 7 in queue. Just.

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Review #12, by Shruti Manipulation

5th October 2017:
This is so so amazing ❤❤
Ok so Dom and Michael met in France.
Idk I love Dom with Mike than Matt.
Nothing against him but I just feel some sparks b/w mike and dom.

The last scene was unexpected but I loved it.❤
Ok so why are they after James??
I absolutely love that angle.
Some action and mystery is always welcome.
Is her father behind all this?
Does kane family coming to London has anything to do with it??

Author's Response: Ee!! THANK YOU!!! Its always good to hear that people are enjoying it.
I love how keen you are about the story, all questions will be answered in upcoming chapters. Stay tuned, chapter 7 will be up soon.

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Review #13, by Scose Manipulation

30th September 2017:
Oh. My. This is incredible. So in love with the story. Please update soon. Amazing. Absolutly incredible ❤

Author's Response: Thank you so SO much! Feedback is always appreciated. I'm so glad you're enjoying this. Stay tuned for Chapter 7. Its almost done.

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Review #14, by Livchin2000 Passive

13th September 2017:
His is really good. Please update

Author's Response: Yes, yes. I will. I'm working on chapter 6.
You just made my day. :'). Thank you for the review.

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Review #15, by DumbRavenclaw Dream Another Dream

2nd September 2017:
Really interesting story please keep writing
Looking forward to the next chapters

Author's Response: Thank you for the appreciation!! THANK YOU. Thank you. Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
I have chapter five almost ready.Stay tuned. :D.

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Review #16, by 800 words of heaven Prologue.

16th August 2013:
Hello! Here with your exceptionally late review request!

In the first section alone, I think you've done really well in setting up your main character. She seems to be damaged and feels the need to hide her true feelings from the world, so already, she's an interesting character. However, the defensive girl falling for the understanding guy is a little cliche, so I'm looking forward to seeing how you make it work and give your own spin on things!

So I was a little confused about the setting of the flashback. Before the flashback, you said it was at the end of first year, but then you go on to describe winter, which happens at the end of first term, so when exactly is it? I'm going to go with the end of first term, simply because you set the scene for that time, as well the fact that it would make sense that James and Isobel still don't quite know each other by then, especially if Isobel is a little reticent. One other thing with the flashback was that Isobel's narration sounded a little too juvenile. I know that she's five years younger than she is in the main timeline, and that you were really trying to illustrate her youth, but she sounded far younger than eleven.

You describe your setting really well, helping to paint the scene for the reader. I think that's great, and a skill that you should really hone until you're even better, because it's something that's really important for readers, as it helps them to connect with the story.

This was a nice introduction to the story. I have an idea as to where the plot is going, and you've established your OC rather well. I'm looking forward to seeing how you'll treat a girl from a hardcore pureblood family sorted into Gryffindor, surrounded by "blood traitors"!

Author's Response: FIRST OFF, I'm extremely sorry for the late response, for a review that I requested. That being said, I'll begin with the flash back part. I wanted Isobel to sound a little stubborn at that age, but you are right, re reading that scene has made me see how she looks immature more than anything. Improvements are being made to change that impact.
With Dom's friendship to Isobel, I had an idea for justifying the hypocrisy on Isobel's behalf, but I do see your concern with the blatant need to ignore James and acknowledge Dom fully. Thats also dully noted. I've been working on making changes to that too. All in all, I really appreciate all the feedback. You have pointed out things that can help me improve more and more. Thank you for that. I hope you enjoyed my piece. :)

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Review #17, by ShadowRose Prologue.

6th August 2013:
Hello there, I'm here with your (rather late) requested review!

This is an interesting story - I can see that you're kind of trying to parallel the story of James and Lily but in a next-generation setting, and obviously, with rather different characters.

James has a very straightforward characterization, in that he's popular, a prankster, and is in love with this one girl. It is really similar to the original James, and while I know that that's probably what you're aiming for here, try to give him a little bit of a personality that's not based on his grandfather's, because it makes him more relatable.

Also, Isobel is an interesting character as well. It seems she has a bit of a backstory, and is a bit snarky and snappy as well. I like characters that have a bit of sass to them. :) I am a little confused about one thing, however: why is she so completely against James, but is happily best friends with Dom? I know you sort of explained it in the story, but I feel like it needs a more convincing explanation to really make sense, because right now it looks a tad hypocritical on Isobel's part to me.

The first flashback worked well in the story, and didn't really interrupt the flow at all. With the flashback (or whatever it is) at the very end, it might be good to specify that there's a point-of-view change or something like that, because it left me confused for a moment.

Also, I noticed quite a few grammar and spelling errors in this chapter. They can interrupt the flow, so I'd recommend getting a beta from the forums who can look over chapters for you and make any necessary changes. We all make mistakes, and oftentimes other people are much better at catching them than we are!

Overall, this looks like a very promising story - it'll be interesting to see where you take it. Feel free to re-request for later chapters!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Thank you for taking out the time to review my chapter. Its much appreciated.
James's and Isobel's characterisation will undergo development as the story progresses.
I love how to enjoyed Isobel's snark, its what I love about her too. And there will be more where this came from. So yay. As for the flashback in the end, I'm planning on adding more to that chapter to clarify the change in point of view for future.
As for the hypocrisy, I do have a justification for that in future chapters. But I understand your concern and I am considering edits to improve this part of my story better.
As for the grammar mistakes, yes, I noticed them too. After uploading the chapter. Gotta be more careful next time.
SO THANK YOU. Your feedback has put things into perspective, which is much appreciated. I hoped you enjoyed reading it. :)

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Review #18, by BookDinosaur Prologue.

26th July 2013:
Hello! -BookDinosaur- here, please forgive me for this criminally late review. Feel free to throw small inanimate objects at me. Really.

I really like your characterisation of Isobel, she seems like a really believable, realistic character. I would like to know how she became a Gryffindor though, especially if she acts so much like a Slytherin. I also like James as a character, he's very likeable and I especially like how he's pursuing Isobel for a reason, rather than just mindlessly asking her out, like I've seen in many cliche stories. However, he does seem very similar to James I, so I'd just caution against that.

My main gripe with this story is how Isobel was so against getting to know James, but she happily becomes friends with Dom. I know it's explained in the story, but it still doesn't quite make sense to me. Also, I saw a couple of typos throughout the story, so I'd recommend looking into a beta.

I liked how you put in the flashback in, it didn't interrupt the flow at all. The only CC have for you there is that Isobel sounds really young for eleven, almost too young to be believed.

All in all I really liked this as an opening chapter, it was great. :)

Author's Response: Okay. Hi. And no, I'm not planning on any physical harm. :) LOL

So, Isobel. There is a lot more to Isobel and you'll soon find out why she is a Gryffindor once I'm done being lazy and get back to writing.
James. Yess. That is one of my major concerns. For James to be true to his identity rather than that of his grandfathers. However that, will also develop more as the story unfolds. He wont be similar to James I, I assure you. :)
Really? The flashback sounds too young. Oh on. I wanted to be careful with that because in my head I was okay with her sounding younger instead of older than 11. :P
All and all,
Thank you for your review. They are always appreciated. :D

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Review #19, by MadiMalfoy A fan of my sarcasm

12th July 2013:
Hello again! :)

Yay, a longer chapter! I quite liked it, what with the pranking Gryffindors on the Slytherin Quidditch team! I feel like that competition would never die out, just because that's how it always has been and always will be! :)

Using Isobel as the narrator was a great idea, and I'm glad you didn't change from person to person or use third person. It allows for a more personal connection to the piece and helps us understand your original character better, kind of learn about her thought process and feelings towards the others she interacts with.

Just a few grammar/spelling errors that interrupted the consistency, but those can be fixed with a proofreading. :) Other than that, there really isn't much for me to say for this chapter besides that the pranks were stellar and the bets are totally typical of them!

Great job, please re-request for future chapters! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx

Author's Response: Hi. :D
Chapter three will be much longer and so is taking time to write. I personally thought of this chapter as quite a filler, and then I gave it that cliffhanger ending. It felt weird writing a filler second chapter. And of course. The bets were typical. So yeah. :P
Yes! The grammar. Must get in the habit of proof reading!
-Kate. Xx

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Review #20, by MadiMalfoy Prologue.

9th July 2013:
Hey there! :) Here's your requested review!

Characterization: I think you've characterized James II very well! He's a popular prankster with a bunch of girls with immature crushes on him but really only likes one girl. Very canonical, so good job!! Since Isobel, and Edward are your OC's I won't say much, except that I really like them! There's a lot of potential for even better character development, so take that opportunity!

As far as flow goes, it works pretty well. The flashbacks aren't just thrown it, there's a sense of order and importance to them. The only thing really interrupting the flow is the grammar and spelling errors you have here and there. I think with a quick proofreading you could find those and fix them no problem!

As a whole, a great opening chapter! Please feel free to re-request for future chapters! :)
~MadiMalfoy xx

Author's Response: You know that rush of excitement when you see an increment in the number of reviews. Yeah that feeling. :D. Its aweeesooomme!

I'm glad you liked James. I want him to be like-able. :P. And about Isobel and Ed, there's a lot more to them, you'll find out more and more about them as the story proceeds.
Ah! Proof reading. Need to stop being lazy and proof read! I would love to re-request. :D
Kate. :D

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Review #21, by Rae Ella Prologue.

1st July 2013:
Very interesting. Keen to see where this goes

Author's Response: THANK YOU. :D

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